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The qualities a person needs to become truly successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Dear friend, I am writing
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 email to you,because
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 intend to describe to you a new kind of sport which
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 explored for myself and probably for you is vastly interesting. As
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 remember you wrote to me that you like running and walking so football will suit you a lot.Presently the most popular kind of sport with an enormous budget and an immense amount of followers in the universe.In comparison with complex kinds
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 as a chees or baseball ,you are able to learn rules within one day.Soccer combines team games and active leisure which is preventing cardiovascular diseases and making your body fitter.In ,addition
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 is the best way to find new friends,
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 your body produces adrenaline
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 you do not feel
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 want to say that
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 will a pleasurable to you if we begin training together next week,
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 our English rapidly enhances ,and our friendship will get stronger. Hope you will agree.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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