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Some people think that people who do physical work should be paid as same as the people who have high level degree. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #level
Certain
people
 claim that individuals
which
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 do some handiwork should reach the same salary
such
 as highly degreed
people
. I completely agree with
this
 statement
,
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 and believe that in future
this
 thing will be decided. Obviously, a second of the major reasons why
people
 reach so small salaries is that fact what
people
 do not understand
essential
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 of physical work for the
hole
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whole
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 world.
This
 means that importance
from
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of
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such
 as builders is not
value
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with
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by
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 individuals like
broker
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brokers
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 for somebody,
however
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,however
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builder
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builders
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 make considerably
benefitial
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beneficial
product
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products
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 for huge
of
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consumers.
Second
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 value cause of my
agreed
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 is
a
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my understanding that
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the bigest
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bigest
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biggest
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 majority of the total, unfortunately, can not afford to reach
the
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a
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highly
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high
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 level of degree because there are no well-being status
such
 as businessmen.
In other words
, certain
people
 can not choose the job where they want to work and they
chouse
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choose
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a tipical
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tipical
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typical
 physical job
while
through
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over
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the
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apply
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time
a
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an
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 l lot of
would
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them would
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 like to change their job to more highly paying. Waiters,
for instance
, many cases what there are growing for a
while
 and achieved
essential
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an essential
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 position.
On the other hand
,
people
 may disagree because
this
 will be caused without
education
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an education
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 nation.
In other words
, nobody will want to study and become a degree. In conclusion, it is clear what
community
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the community
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 needed in
education
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an education
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 nation but some individuals can not afford it
while
it
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its
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 not
reason
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a reason
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 to decrease a salary. In my view,
people
are require
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require
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a
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normal well-being and should earn an identical salary
such
 as
highly
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a highly
the highly
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 educated nation.
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