The pie charts illustrates the number of sales in different spheres of online shopping in New Zealand during 10 years.

The pie charts illustrates the number of sales in different spheres of online shopping in New Zealand during 10 years.
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depicts the number of sales in four spheres, which are travel,film,books and clothes in New Zealand from 2003 to 2013 .It is clear from
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that the highest number of sales was
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travel in 2003 and in films/music in 2013.
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what is shown, in 2003 the biggest percentage is 36% in travel,after that clothes which is 24% .The lowest figure was
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books 19%. in 2013
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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