Some people think the developments involving the Internet have brought people closer together while others think that people And communities have become more isolated. dicuss both the views and give your opinion.

The
internet
has radically changed the way we communicate.
While
some argue that the web brought
people
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closer than
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years others claim that it
drifed
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drifted
drives
people
apart.
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essay will discuss both
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views and my opinion . On
one
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hand , some mankind
believe
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that
internet
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seprate
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separates
the
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unity . Because of the
internet
,
people
tend to spend more time on
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phone
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or
computer
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even when
ther
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they
are
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.
Hence
they do not have time for family and friends. For
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example , earlier when there
were
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no
internet
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, family get together
on
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festival
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was common
as well as
family
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a family
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usually take dinner together
while
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nowadays friends and family greets virtually rather meet in person.
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,
people
loose
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their social skills. Using
of
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too
much
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social
website
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websites
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such
as
facebook
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and
instagram
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people
feel more comfortable
to talk
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in
message
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therefore
social skills
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are deminished
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deminished
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diminished
day by day.
On the other hand
, some
school
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of
thoughts
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think that
web
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brings
people
together as one .
first
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the first
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reason is via
internet
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communication is easy and affordable. To illustrate, if someone lives in
united
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states
then
one can contact them and talk to them
as per
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their convenience without wasting
their
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millions of dollars and by saving their time to travel.
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point is
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the internet
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internet
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is
cost effective
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.
people
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can easily communicate with anyone without spending lots of money . distance seems less because of many websites . To clear that , if
student
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the student
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lives in
canada
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Canada
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, he or she feels less homesick
beacuse
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because
he can talk to his family on
videocall
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video call
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and see them virtually . To summarise , by agglomerating all the arguments
afforementioned
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aforementioned
above ,
people
somehow drifted by technology , i personally believe
internet
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the internet
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is
boon
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a boon
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for every mankind as it brings family and friends
more close
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closer
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than ever before in various ways.
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