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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of beibg self-ployed?

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In the competitive era,
people
 have to fight so
hardly
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 to
achive
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achieve
 a great platform as a job. In recent days, many
indviduals
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individuals
 take a chance to be self-development
compare
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compared
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 to
work
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working
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 for a factory or company. There are both positive and negative aspects behind the reason.
This
eassy
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essay
easy
 will describe the reason and cons of being self-employed. To
commnce
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commence
 with, Govt.
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job
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jobs
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 are so lucrative
as
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and
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high
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 competitive with
certain
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a certain
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level
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 of
facility
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. For that reason, many
people
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firstly
first
 try to engage themself to sit for
BCS
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the BCS
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 exam with
a
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good expectations.
Although
 only 2 or 3
percent
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 of students cut
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excellent
result
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results
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, others
are go
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 through
very
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 devastating
situation
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situations
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.
Consequently
, many
indviduals
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individuals
 change their decision for adapting themself as
a
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self-driving
person
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people
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 where they easily conduct
business
 or growth
of
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in
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development
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the development
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 sectors.
For example
, many young adults are so
focusing
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about
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on
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 doing something in agriculture and growing
business
 in any field.
In addition
, some
people
 believe themself as
self-sufficient
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a self-sufficient
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person
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people
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 to increase the quality of
soft
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their soft
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 skills
where
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when
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 they perform
foreign
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the foreign
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 or economic analytical
task
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tasks
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 with proper communication. On the
another
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other
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 hand, there are some detrimental effects received to the self-employer
on
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in
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going
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the going
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 process of self-development. In the
fitst
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first
 stage, some individuals can not invest money accurately to enlarge their
business
 with planning.
For instance
, there are need
a
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numbers
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number
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 of
people
 as staff
as
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to
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 open a farmhouse & huge economy to build the infrastructure development.
In
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 a result, he
who
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could not manage investment properly even though sometimes he fail to manage proper communication
where
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when
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 he find lending money.
Besides
, if he
who
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face
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faces
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 any loss in his
business
in
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every year, he couldn’t manage without
support
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the support
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others
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of others
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. In conclusion, the quality of self-employment is indeed a tremendous development
of
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 any freshers. Even though there are some crucial
scenerio
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scenario
 in self-employment job sectors, they are independent to exaggerate their
business
 in every scrutiny of
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the situation
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.
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