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the graphs below show the percentage of households with internet and broadband access in Australia, together with frequency of internet access, between 2006-07 and 2012-13. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

the graphs below show the percentage of households with internet and broadband access in Australia, together with frequency of internet access, between 2006-07 and 2012-13. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant
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The line graph provides information on an explanation of why British people had no
internet
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 access over a six-year period.
Overall
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, it shows that the main reason for not having
internet
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 from 2008 to 2014, was that British people found it unuseful/uninteresting. Looking at the chart, it can be seen that three reasons
such
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 as unusefulness, lack of skills and privacy/security concerns had a rising trend within the timeframe.
Firstly
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, above 30% of the household did not use the
Internet
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 in 2008
due to
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 practical issues.
This
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 number continued to rise over the
years
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, and reached its peak in 2013, before dropping to around 52% in 2014.
Similarly
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, the number of people with no
internet
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 skills, raised from around 13% to 22%, from 2008 to 2011.
Nonetheless
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, it plateaued over the next 2
years
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, before dropping in 2013 and having a significant jump in 2014 at about 32%.
Next,
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about 3% of the population was concerned about the privacy/security factors of the
internet
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 in 2008.
Such
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 a number was hovered for 3
years
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, before dropping in 2013 and slightly raised in 2014 to 8%.
In contrast
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, expensive costs of equipment and access to online activities showed a declining trend over the
years
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. First of all, there was around 2% difference between them in 2008, at 15% and 13%, respectively. These numbers were fluctuating over the
years
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 before they declined
further
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 and reached their lowest value at approximately 11%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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