Parents should take courses in parenting in order to improve the lives of their children. To what extend do you agree.

As
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
technology grows
people
across the
globle
Correct your spelling
globe
global
suspects
to upgrade
Change the verb form
upgrading
show examples
themselves in parenting to encourage their
child
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
the correct path. Whether every
parent
should take
this
as a mandatory skill or they can
guideline
Replace the word
guide
show examples
with
own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
show examples
life
experience is a
never ending
Add a hyphen
never-ending
show examples
debate. Can anyone deny that in older days without any parenting
course
parent
's brought up their
children
and shaped their lifestyles? Certainly not. In the modern world, the cost of education is in lakhs even for pre-school
child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
show examples
in international schools even
then
they suggest
parent
to
Remove the particle
apply
show examples
take courses like parenting to improve
child's
Correct article usage
a child's
show examples
life
. Will
this
course
really teaches
a useful information
Remove the article
useful information
a piece of useful information
show examples
how
Change preposition
about how
show examples
the
oldage
Correct your spelling
old age
people
guide ? Obviously no. To illustrate, to connect
childern
Correct your spelling
children
to the latest trend, public speakers or socially influenced
person
Fix the agreement mistake
people
show examples
are suggesting individuals to grab attention in parenting
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
.
In addition
, office goers
does
Change the verb form
do
show examples
not spend time with their
child
so
children
will be mentally affected
for
Change preposition
by
show examples
kind
Correct article usage
the kind
show examples
of care and love. In that case, parents should learn parenting to interact with
children
during their free time. In the early centuries, without much
communications
Fix the agreement mistake
communication
show examples
parents are
invloved
Correct your spelling
involved
in shaping their
child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
show examples
in the organic food style. Even famous
people
like Alexander Graham Bell who invented
telephone
Change the article
the telephone
show examples
,
Charles
Correct word choice
and Charles
show examples
Babbage who invented
computer
Correct article usage
the computer
show examples
did they
originated
Wrong verb form
originate
show examples
because of their parenting? Indeed no.
For instance
, maintaining a peaceful
life
and encouraging
thier
Correct your spelling
their
child
's own interest was the only reason for many investors to come out.
Moreover
,
Parent
stay
Change the verb form
stays
show examples
as a backbone in the failures so
children
reaches
Change the verb form
reach
show examples
greater height.
To conclude
, the
course
for parenting is not required if you have
life
exposure and how to handle the situation.
Thus
I strongly believe
Add an article
a parent
show examples
parent
Fix the agreement mistake
parents
show examples
should focus on their ancient culture to grow in
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
healthier way as in those centuries
people
led a successful
life
compartively
Correct your spelling
comparatively
with
required
Correct article usage
the required
show examples
lifestyle.
Submitted by gs250485 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: