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Parents should take courses in parenting in order to improve the lives of their children. To what extend do you agree.

#parents #courses #lives #children
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As
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technology grows
people
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 across the
globle
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globe
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 themselves in parenting to encourage their
child
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in
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 the correct path. Whether every
parent
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 should take
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 as a mandatory skill or they can
guideline
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 with
own
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their own
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life
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 experience is a
never ending
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 debate. Can anyone deny that in older days without any parenting
course
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parent
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's brought up their
children
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 and shaped their lifestyles? Certainly not. In the modern world, the cost of education is in lakhs even for pre-school
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child
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children
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 in international schools even
then
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 they suggest
parent
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to
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take courses like parenting to improve
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child's
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a child's
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life
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. Will
this
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course
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 really teaches
a useful information
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how
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about how
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 the
oldage
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old age
people
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 guide ? Obviously no. To illustrate, to connect
childern
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children
 to the latest trend, public speakers or socially influenced
person
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 are suggesting individuals to grab attention in parenting
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course
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courses
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.
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, office goers
does
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 not spend time with their
child
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 so
children
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 will be mentally affected
for
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kind
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 of care and love. In that case, parents should learn parenting to interact with
children
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 during their free time. In the early centuries, without much
communications
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communication
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 parents are
invloved
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involved
 in shaping their
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child
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children
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 in the organic food style. Even famous
people
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 like Alexander Graham Bell who invented
telephone
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,
Charles
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and Charles
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 Babbage who invented
computer
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 did they
originated
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 because of their parenting? Indeed no.
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, maintaining a peaceful
life
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 and encouraging
thier
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their
child
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's own interest was the only reason for many investors to come out.
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,
Parent
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stay
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 as a backbone in the failures so
children
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reaches
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 greater height.
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, the
course
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 for parenting is not required if you have
life
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 exposure and how to handle the situation.
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 I strongly believe
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a parent
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parent
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parents
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 should focus on their ancient culture to grow in
the
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 healthier way as in those centuries
people
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 led a successful
life
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compartively
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comparatively
 with
required
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the required
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 lifestyle.
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