The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

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The pie charts give information about the

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used for residential, industrial and agricultural purposes in

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Diego

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County,

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and the world as a whole. It is noticeable that more

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is consumed by homes than by industry or agriculture in the two American regions.

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, agriculture accounts for the vast majority of the

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used worldwide. In

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Diego

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County and

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State, residential

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consumption accounts for 60% and 39% of total

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usage.

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, a mere 8% of the

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used globally goes to homes. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at

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consumption for agriculture.

This

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accounts for a massive 69% of global

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use, but only 17% and 28% of

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usage in

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Diego

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and

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respectively.

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dramatic differences are not seen when we compare the figures for industrial

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use. The same proportion of

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(23%) is used by industry in

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Diego

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and worldwide,

while

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the figure for

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is 10% higher, at 33%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, san, diego, california with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that thia would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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