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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Living in a
country
when
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where
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 you have to speak
foreign
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a foreign
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language
its
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really can cause serious social problems because people do not know what are you saying,
i
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I
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 agree with
this
 statement because people may be offended when you are wrong
while
 speaking their
language
. It feels uncomfortable when you have you speak
with
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a foreign
language
 that you did not know
from
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in
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 the first place. But you can learn the
language
 when you are not in that
country
 or before you went to the
country
. So when you go to that
country
, you may understand a little bit
what
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of what
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 they are speaking. Because
it’s
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it
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 won’t be
such
thing
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a thing
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 when you can speak their
language
, and it will not cause you
in to
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into
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 serious problems and if it is, you can get yourself out
from
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of
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 that.
In
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At
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 one moment, I
am disagree
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disagree
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 with
this
 statement because people may not be offended by your
words
 because a few of them may understand that you are not from their
country
. But still, many of them may
will
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be offended by your
words
, some
words
 that
maybe
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may be
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a
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bad
words
 but you do not know.
That is
 why you should learn what
language
 are they using or try to learn their
language
 from a course or something because when you are in
a
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another
country
 with a foreign
language
, you will understand what are they saying surely.
Although
, you are not knowing 100% from their conversation,
atleast
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at least
 you will not always get
in to
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into
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a particular problems
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a particular problem
particular problems
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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