The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of

meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The given line graph describes the changes
of
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fish
and some different
kind
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kinds
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of meat in a European country over a period of 25 years from 1979 to 2004 As can be
cleanly
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seen from the graph the number of
fish
was lower than some different
kind
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kinds
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of meat
while
lamb and beef
decline
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chicken had experienced a fluctuating rise. In terms of
fish
, between 1979 and 2004, the export of
fish
rapidly fall from 60 to 40 grams
Likewise
, lamb consumption sharply drop from 150 to 70 grams between 1979 to 2004 At the outset, in 1979 beef accounted
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the
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large share of meat consumption. And
then
, during the
periods
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from 1984 to 2004, there was a significant drop from 120 to 100 grams.
Finally
, in sharp contrast chicken consumption over a period of 25 years starting from 1979 to 2004, there was a
decrease
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from 140 to 250 years
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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