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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Scientific developments are occurring at a great rate but some of them do not seem to be of help to
people
. In fact, sometimes scientific innovations are regretted by those who invented them.
This
 essay will argue that science should never harm
people
 but
scientists
 should aim to
further
 their understanding as much as to improve
people
's
lives
. On one hand, there is a strong argument that the public good should be the top priority for
scientists
. They are the ones who have the potential to make discoveries and invent things that can change the world. Electricity, modern medicine, telecommunications and the internet are just some of the scientific innovations that have changed
lives
 for the better.
On the other hand
, sometimes
scientists
 do research just in the hope of adding to their knowledge.
While
 they should make absolutely sure that their experiments do not harm, they may not know until they have finished how their findings will be used and whether they will improve
people
's
lives
. The scientist Nobel invented dynamite to help with mining, not knowing that it would one day be used in weapons, and the scientist who discovered the life-saving drug penicillin did so quite by chance.
Overall
, it seems that science should improve the
lives
 of
people
 and that ought to be one of its aims.
However
, knowledge and discovery are aims in themselves and are just as important for
scientists
. Sometimes
scientists
 do not know how their scientific breakthroughs will be used until their work is done.
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