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The graph illustrates the process by which bricks are generated for the architecture industry.

The graph illustrates the process by which bricks are generated for the architecture industry.
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The graph illustrates the process by which
bricks
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 are generated for the architecture industry.
Overall
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, there are seven stages of brick manufacturing from digging the clay to the delivery.
Firstly
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, the digger machine excavates the clay from the earth and puts them on the metal grid.
Additionally
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, there be rollers under the table for the cleaned sand which
deprived
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from
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of
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 the stones.
Moreover
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, there are two types of making
bricks
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. Both of them are made by mixing
the
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sand and water. In the first one, the mixture pours to the container which has a wire cutter for getting the basic
bricks
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. In the second situation, the mixture fills the mould. It is not the end of the process. The
bricks
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 keep in
drying
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a drying
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 oven for one or two days.
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, the
bricks
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 reach
to
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the kiln where they are in the hot temperature. The moderate temperature is 200C – 980C, and
highest
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the highest
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 is 870C-1300C.
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 hot products get into the cooling chamber for two or three days.
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, the packaging
bricks
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 distributes by delivery truck.
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