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Describe a day when y u th ught the weather was perfect.

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Weather
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 is an important part of our lives, and it can impact our mood, productivity and activities. I remember one
day
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in particular
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, the
weather
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 was so nice and it really give me
a
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 unforgettable experience，
it’s
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it was
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 about a year ago
,
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 when I went to an
island
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 with
girlfriend
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my girlfriend
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, it’s in Lang Tengah. It was a special
day
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 since it was my girlfriend’s birthday as well. On
this
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 particular
day
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, the
weather
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 was absolutely perfect. It was sunny, warm and breezy with clear blue skies. The temperature was just right, not too hot or too cold, and there was a refreshing breeze blowing through the
beach
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. It was the kind of
weather
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 that made you want to spend time outdoors and enjoy the beauty of
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beach
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the beach
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. We
also
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 did a lot of things that
day
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, we went to the
island
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 the
day
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 before her birthday because we planned to be on the
island
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 for the whole
day
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 of her birthday. So the fine
weather
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 that
day
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also
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 made us feel very happy. We had breakfast together on the
island
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 in the morning, and
then
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 we went diving together, we saw a lot of different fish, the nice
weather
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 and diving is really a perfect match. At noon we enjoyed the hotel's buffet. The restaurant is located right by the
beach
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, and we could enjoy the food with the sea breeze. In the afternoon we found a quiet place by the
beach
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, watched a movie together, and took a rest by the
beach
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. The sunset glow that
day
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 was
also
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 very beautiful, and we had many good memories and photos that
day
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. I considered
this
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day
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 perfect because the
weather
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 was ideal for outdoor activities, it was not too hot or cold, and the clear blue skies made the
beach
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 even more beautiful. It was a
day
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 that brought
enjoy
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enjoyment
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 and
beautiful
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a beautiful
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 memory to me and my girlfriend.
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