These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In the world today , it is seen that cell phones and cyberspace are necessities for socialization among human begins.
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essay will outline the reasons why its benefits outweighed the disadvantages.
Technology has advanced in recent years and spread across the globe including urban and rural areas, where there is the availability of mobile and Internet in most places, Linking Words
thus
enhancing socialization among humans. Linking Words
Although
there are places yet to experience these trends and are left out of socializing within the outside world and Linking Words
also
the elderly, who lack knowledge of using these devices find it hard to participate in the trending moment but these gaps will be filled as the movement of technology advancement will get to all corner in no time.
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, despite the drawbacks, there is various positive effect, Linking Words
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cut
distance barriers and enhance communication whereby most information can be passed across to the receiver within seconds without stress and delays. For, example, Wrong verb form
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due to
busy work schedules a person can keep communicating with a partner without seeing face to face or going on a date, Linking Words
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sustaining their social life without stress, Linking Words
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, invitations for parties and meetings are sent online, which is easier and cheaper to get messages to more people and Linking Words
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finally
, many individuals make their money through social networks as most of these media pay their cable subscribers that pull traffic online and Linking Words
also
individual businesses get patronage by socializing and advertising on social networks in cyberspace. For ,example Twitter owner Elon Musk Linking Words
pay
celebrities and influencers more followers and liked videos, Wrong verb form
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in subscribing
To conclude
, the use of mobile phones and the Internet are the key factors to socialization among human beings which have some consequences of isolating certain humans from socializing but despite ,that it improves communication, and bonding and is a source of income to the populace.Linking Words
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...