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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people
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 believe that the only reason for learning foreign languages is to travel abroad or to work abroad in the country they need to learn their
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 as communication with native
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 and learning from them will
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 others think that it is not the only way because in modern days the world has changed. In my point of view, there are other reasons to learn a third or a
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language
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day
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 the shops, work, and
resturants
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restaurants
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 to practice it
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forgien
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foreign
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, other
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learning has become easier.
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, some
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 has changed our world .In my opinion, travelling abroad
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 the only reason to learn a foreign
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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