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The presented graph illustrates information about the proportion of unemployment women in four different countries of the United Kingdoms in 2013 and 2014.

The presented graph illustrates information about the proportion of unemployment women in four different countries of the United Kingdoms in 2013 and 2014.
The presented graph illustrates information about the proportion of
unemployment
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unemployed
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 women in four different countries of the United
Kingdoms
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Kingdom
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 in 2013 and 2014. We can clearly see that the percentage of three countries out of four had reduced,
although
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Scotland
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 slightly increased their result. In 2013, the share of
female
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females
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 who
are
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is
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 jobless in England was
at
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apply
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6.8% ,
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moreover
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 it was higher than in
the
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apply
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Scotland
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 and
Nothern
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Northern
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 Ireland,at 6.1% and 5.6% respectively.
Whereas
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the
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apply
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Wales had the lowest unemployment rate of ladies among the four nations,
that is
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 5.1% . In the following year,
Scotland
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 upsurged from 6.1% to 6.7% ,
consequenlty
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consequently
Scotland
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 had the highest unemployment rate. Backwards, the percentage of unemployed females in
Nothern
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Northern
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 Ireland was the lowest at 4.6%. Meanwhile, Wales and England had 6.5% and 5% of unoccupied women.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words scotland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presented" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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