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Some people believe that to be successful in a sport, natural ability is necessary, while others think hard work and practice is more import. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has been a fierce argument that natural capability determines one’s accomplishment in
a
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athletics
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 or hard endeavour and practice play a key role in the achievement of a
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sport
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 player. It is true that natural talent and continued effort are both vital elements to assist sports athletes to succeed.
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, I personally believe that hard work and practice play a more critical role in
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 success in
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. It is understandable that some individuals agree that natural talent is a key element in deciding one’s achievement in
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athletics
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 because there are a couple of reasons to support their view of point.
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normally a
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sport
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 player was identified by professionals when the person was
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 a younger age and just started the
game
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 without much coaching and practising on it.
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the natural ability of
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 could trigger
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athletics
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 as the personnel could recognise
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 as an area which he/she potents. Even though we could not deny the importance of innate capability acts an excelled position on identifying high-potential
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sport
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 players, I strongly believe that all
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successful
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sport
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 players contribute a continuous effort to practising and learning.
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no
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 player in the world was born with the ability to be skilful on any
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sport
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 field before having appropriate coaching and guidance from professional trainers.
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there is
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 a number of human beings in the world having talents in the same
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 and the one thing that distinguishes their achievements in the end is how hard
inviduals
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individuals
 work on the activities. Many real examples prove hard work and practice make a great athlete. Coby Byran and James Byran are persuasive examples in NBA history, which presents the secret of their success in basketball as diligence. Messi was
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 a convincing case to demonstrate dedicated efforts to make a person succeed in a
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. To summarise,
human
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 can start interested in a
game
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 if they have inborn skills in some sports.
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 diligence and continuous
commitments
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to
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determine athletes’ success in their careers.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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