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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

#people #cities #place #countryside
It is argued that whether cities or
countryside
 are more worth living. Despite
this
 writer contending that living in
countryside
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the countryside
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 has more advantages
such
 as
cheaper
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a cheaper
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 cost of living and less pollution, some individuals believe that living in cities
are
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favorable
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. In
the
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recent years,
countryside
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the countryside
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 has developed and improved, becoming modern and convenient for citizens. More and more infrastructures are built and companies are intending to interest
for
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in
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 it. These factors make
countryside
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the countryside
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 get attractive to many entrepreneurs and industrialize. Because of
its
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it
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,
countryside
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the countryside
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 is a good place for
who
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those who
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wants
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want
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 to find a job.
In addition
, the cost of living in
garden
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 city is cheaper and more affordable when compares to the cities’ s.
Therefore
, it will be more suitable for the poor and unemployed. Since the price of the area is
also
 preferable, each of the houses would
has
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large
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a large
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 area, which
help
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 children to have more space to play. Many doctors advise their patients to come to the rural area for recuperation, as the air there is fresh and less polluted by the effects of the industries.
However
, some people
have
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a
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view of living
at
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in
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 the cities
are
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is
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 much
accommodating
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more accommodating
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 because of having modern equipment and facilities. The consequences of industrialization on the environment are threatening some citizens through the food they eat and the air they breathe in which
leading
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 to many diseases of
respiratory
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the respiratory
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 and digestive
system
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,
for instance
, cancer.
Moreover
, it is seen that the rates of
the
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crime in
an
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 urban are higher than in the rural.
This
 writer believes that present rural areas are becoming advantageous and appealing for people to settle down. Citizens should have a look
on
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 the benefits they have and try living there, they might realize how the
countryside
 has changed over the years.

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