In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, it starting to be more and more popular when
children
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searching or engaging for
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a
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job in
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early years. On the one hand, it is a big problem when
children
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waste their childhood in part-time jobs. Kids have not
get
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any experience,
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that
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which
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is why most of them
work
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in social jobs
such
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as
waiter
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.
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, in Kazakhstan one day
on
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of
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work
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can take 16 hours,
reason
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the reason
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for that,
it
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is it
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is easy for the employee to replace you
by
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with
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other worker
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another worker
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, cause
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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jobs where
children
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work
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, do not need a lot of skills and
experiences
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experience
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, so most of the employers use that and giving you too much
work
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hours.
On the other hand
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, working in a free time for most
children
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have more plusses than minuses. Most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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children
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do not know how to use given time in
a
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the
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right
way
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, so
for
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parents are better to
engaged
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engage
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their
child
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children
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in
summer
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the summer
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holidays
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holiday
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to
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apply
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work
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. By experiencing the
way
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of claiming money by
yourself
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themselves
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, most,
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of their
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their
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apply
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children
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start to spend their money only
for
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on
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needed and wished things. There are a great deal of examples when
children
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from rich
family
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families
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, changed their
way
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of thinking to not only for money, but
also
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for workers. In conclusion, there
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are a
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bunch of positive and negative affect from working in your childhood, but it is
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an unchangable
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unchangable
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unchangeable
experience that you will use for all your life. It is a
choose
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of all people did they need
this
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experience or
they
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do they
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prefer
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spend their childhood in the other
way
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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