Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, many
people
claims
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that
cities
are the best habitat to live
while
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in while
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others prefer to live in the garden
cities
, both
aspect
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aspects
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have their
benifits
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benefits
and
unfavorable
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unfavourable
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. From my point of
views
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view
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, living in the
cities
are
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is
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the best way. First of all, there are a lot of advantages
living
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in the city
such
as convenient
transports
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transport
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everywhere, citizens can move smoothly from
any where
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.
For instance
, when their vehicles are broken, they can take a taxi to go to work or
cities
have many bus systems that
people
can take the bus,
this
point
also
making
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themselves
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them
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save money.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
in
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cities
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have much higher living costs that limit lots of living
people
, the price of all utensils, food, etc. In
fact
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many
people
said that the cost of living in
cities
maybe
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may be
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as
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apply
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double of garden
cities
.
On the other hand
, living in
the
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rural areas have fewer jobs,
lots
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and lots
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of young
people
who live in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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move to
cities
to gain
opotunies
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ponies
for
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the job
a job
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job
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jobs
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. Every
years
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year
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, students in
rurals
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rural
areas prefer to register
to
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at
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city university,
this
prove
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to live in the
cities
are much better. Living in garden
cities
have
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has
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the
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a
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great atmosphere with no air pollution.
This
lead to the greater health of
people
. In conclusion, living in both
cities
and rural areas have their own characteristic. In terms of aspects
cities
is the better way one.
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