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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others people prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is
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 considered that cities are the perfect areas to live,
while
the
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apply
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others
who
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believed that
live
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living
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 in the countryside is better. In my opinion, living inner-city will have more high-tech
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 and living in the rural areas is suitable for
people
 who want to let
them
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their
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 hair down. On the one hand, living in the city will have more opportunities to get a well-paid job
due to
 a lot of companies, factories, and
manufactures
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manufacturers
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 there,
that
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which
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 can attract a large number of young adults from rural
area
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areas
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.
People
 tend to live in
the
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a
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 space that can ensure they will have a sophisticated
life
.
Besides
,
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the inner-city
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inner-city
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inner city
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 will have much higher living costs and the levels of crime and unemployment are higher too. That
mean
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means
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 you need to
poised
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be poised
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 on the brink of
thief
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the thief
a thief
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 and become
an
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a
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 circumspect person whenever you want to hang out.
On the other hand
, it is a certitude to believe that
people
 can live a
serenity
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serene
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life
 if they move house to the countryside. The main reason is
humor
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humour
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 can experience
the
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apply
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lower living costs and the pace of
life
 is slower
that
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so that
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 they can enjoy the value
living
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of living
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.
Furthermore
, they can have some prerogative that nowhere
is have
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has
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 like folksy repast, leave the flurried
life style
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lifestyle
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 and admire the natural landscapes. After taking the essay into
considerations
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consideration
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, I am convinced that living in the city will have more capitalization for me to develop myself to the fullest.
Although
 some notion of
people
 that
city
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the city
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 is
the
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a
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 hustle and bustle place, I concur that if I want to become stronger, I need to come to terms with the
difficult
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difficulties
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 and
accepting
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acceptance
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 in my
life
. I believed that the hasty lifestyle is a driving force behind me to try my best.
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