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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the number of
visitors
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 to various Caribbean islands between 2012 and 2017.
Overall
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, the information shows both island
visitors
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 and
cruise
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 ship
visitors
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,
as well as
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 a combination of both types of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, the three lines do reach the maximum for each category, despite some fluctuations.
First,
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despite the fact that both data indicated an increase in the
overall
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 number, a clear increase can be seen from 2010 to 2011.
As a result
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, data increased by roughly half for
visitors
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 who stayed on
cruise
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 ships as opposed to those who stayed on the island.
Additionally
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, between 2012 and 2015, there were 1.2% fewer
visitors
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 staying on land than there were on
cruise
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 ships. The graph shows that around the year 2016, the three charts all showed an almost significant increase,
while
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 the total number of
visitors
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 who stayed on islands or
cruise
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 ships increased by more than 3% in comparison to each visitor who stayed, whether on an island or a ship.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, cruise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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