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some people think cities are the best place to live orthers prefer to live in the countryside discuss both views

#people #cities #place #orthers #countryside
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Places to live and make home is always a topic for argument. Whether
people
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 choose to live in
a
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apply
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capital because of the job opportunities and
convenient
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convenience
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for
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of
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life
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.
This
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 writer prefers to have a basic
life
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 in rural
areas
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 because of the environment. The biggest advantage of living in big cities is
opportunities
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the opportunities
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earn
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to earn
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 a lot of money,
due to
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 develop
country’s
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the country’s
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economic
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economy
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 more
company
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companies
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 in different
profession
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professions
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,
from
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and from
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 that the recruitment
for
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of
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 workers is increasing. That
chances
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changes
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 attract a lot of
people
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 from rural
areas
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 to urban
areas
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 including young
people
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want
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who want
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 to
have
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change
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changed
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 their
life
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.
Moreover
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, the hustle and bustle of city
life
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 will
a
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be a
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suitable place for
people
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 who
positive
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are positive
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 and industrious which the atmosphere of rural
life
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 cannot bring to them.
Although
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 these reasons, the advantages of having rural
life
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 still cannot be denied.
Environment
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The environment
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 of
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countryside
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the countryside
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areas
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always
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is always
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 clean and fresh which
improve
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improves
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breathing
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the breathing
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 system.
Thus
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,
for example
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, old
people
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 who retired would like to move from
capital
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the capital
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 to
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countryside
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the countryside
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 because of the quiet and peaceful atmosphere and some
of
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apply
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young
people
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 who
tired
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are tired
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 of the fast
life
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 and want to run away from
city
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the city
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 often choose to live there. The sense of community in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 which is the
things
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thing
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 hard to see in cities is another reason for
people
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 outgoing and love to make friends choose to live.
To conclude
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,
the
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apply
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life
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of
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in
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city
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the city
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 will help me
a
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with a
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lot of chances in
career
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my career
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, money and
successful
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success
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 when I’m still at young
ages
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age
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. But when I’m getting old and retired I will choose to live in a peaceful place like
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countryside
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the countryside
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.
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