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Some peoplw think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals argue that residing in a
city
 is ideal,
while
 others advocate for living in the
countryside
.
Although
 there are advantages to living in
countryside
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the countryside
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, I believe that having
an
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accommodation in
city
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the city
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even
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 greater benefits. On the one hand, living in a town or a country offers safety for residents.
Firstly
,
people
 can save on building service costs by living in a hamlet for generations.
Secondly
,
people
 can head outdoors and take in the views as it has fresh air and lots of greenery. Living in the
countryside
 is suitable for
people
 who enjoy a slow pace of life.
For instance
, many
people
 got away from
crowd
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 to find peace and quiet in the
countryside
.
On the other hand
, I have a belief that choosing to live in a high-rise
city
 is a superior option. Cities with skyscrapers allow for more efficient use of land.
Moreover
, living in
urban
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 often provides residents with convenient access to an array of goods and services, as shopping malls and service
centers
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 are frequently located in cities. There are many supplies for citizens
such
 as
Internet
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the Internet
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, communication network and other essential facilities. To be specific, many
people
 come from remote villages looking for more job opportunities in major cities. In conclusion,
while
 there are certain benefits to
live
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 in rural, the advantages associated with residing in a
city
 defined make urban living the more appealing choice in my opinion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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