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The table below give information about sales of fairtrade -labelled coffee and bananas in 1990 and 2004 in five European countries

The table below give information about sales of fairtrade -labelled coffee and bananas in 1990 and 2004 in five European countries
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 the information about
sales
 of fair trade labelled
coffee
 and bananas in 1990 and 2004 in five European countries
such
 as
UK
Switzerland
 ,
Denmark
 ,Belgium and Sweden . With
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regards
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,in 1990,
Denmark
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coffee
sale
 was more than the other four
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 coffees
sales
.
Denmark
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coffee
sales
was
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 1.8
millions
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of
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euros. In 2004 ,
UK
coffee
sale
 was increasing .
Sweden
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coffee
sale
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sales
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 was decreasing in 2004 .
UK
coffee
sale
 was 20
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of
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euros .
On the other hand
 ,In 1990 ,the highest
banana
sale
 of
country
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 was
Switzerland
 and the least
banana
sale
 of the country was
Denmark
 in 2004 .
Switzerland
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banana
sale
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sales
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 was increasing
15
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 to 47 .In 2004 ,
Denmark
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banana
sale
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sales
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 was decreasing 2 to 0.9 . In conclusion ,in 1990,
coffee
sales
 were less than
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in 2004
coffee
sales
 .The
banana
sale
 was increasing in
Switzerland
 ,
UK
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 ,
Belgium
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and Belgium
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in
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 1990 to 2004.But
Sweden
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in Sweden
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 and
Denmark
banana
sales
 were decreasing
in
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 1990 to 2004.
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