Whereas the given diagram displays the main causes of agricultural land degradation, the table represents data about impact of the aforementioned reasons to North America, Europe and Oceanida in 1990s.

Whereas the given diagram displays the main causes of agricultural land degradation, the table represents data about impact of the aforementioned reasons to North America, Europe and Oceanida in 1990s.
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Whereas
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the given diagram displays the main causes of agricultural
land
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degradation, the
table
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represents data about
impact
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the impact
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of the aforementioned reasons
to
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on
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North America,
Europe
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and
Oceanida
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Oceania
in
1990s
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the 1990s
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. Generally speaking,
in
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at
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the worldwide level three main reasons can be called owning the maximum percentages among other causes.
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, the
table
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shows that
to
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Europe
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belongs the greatest magnitude of
the
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degraded
land
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and
in contrast
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in North America was indicated the minimum per
cent
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of
land
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becoming worse. Upon initial observation, it becomes evident that the first and main reason
of
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the
land
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problem is over-gazing, precisely, it is equal to 35 per
cent
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.
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,
according to
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the
table
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, in
deforestation
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the deforestation
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field
Europe
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was in
the
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first place in the list of percentages. Compared to it, in 1990 North America
has
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indicated the lowest number in the same field and it was
for
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9.6
percent
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per cent
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less than in
Europe
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. A close examination of the
table
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revealed that in
Oceanida
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Oceania
the
land
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is mostly degraded owing to
the
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over-gazing
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over-grazing
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, displaying
the
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11.3 per
cent
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which was the largest indicator in comparison with other regions respectively. Interesting to notice that the per
cent
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of over-cultivation was equal to zero in the same country,
Oceanida
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Oceania
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, table, europe, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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