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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits.
The bar graph depicts information about the percentage of city
residents's
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residents'
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 behaviour of
coffee
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 and tea purchasing in five different
cities
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 in Australia.
Overall
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, people most likely went to
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea and rarely bought a fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks. On the one hand, Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart
has
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have
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a
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apply
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similar habits
which
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in which
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 they spend their time
to go
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going
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 to a cafe which exceeded
to
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apply
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more than 60%.
However
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, fresh
coffee
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 is rarely preferred in all of the
cities
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 which got no more than a half percentage
which
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apply
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under 45%. Unlike the other
cities
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, Adelaide preferred to
bought
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buy
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an
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apply
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instant
coffee
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 rather than fresh
coffee
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, at half
percents
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percent
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 (50%). Instant
coffee
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are
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is
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 usually
prefered
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preferred
 in all of the urban which ranged from 47% at the lowest and 53% at the highest. Fresh
coffee
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 in Brisbane was the lowest part rather than other
cities
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 which got 35% of city residents.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • percentage
  • frequency
  • preference
  • health benefits
  • caffeine content
  • cultural significance
  • consumption
  • trends
  • venues
  • social aspects
  • beverage
  • shift
  • influence
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • discussion
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