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The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.
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The line graph illustrates data about the
proportion
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 of the residents of four Asian countries who live in
cities
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 in a 50-year period, between 1970 and 2020. It
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 provides predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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, the percentage of the population living in
cities
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 increased significantly,
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 Malaysia headed the list. The general upward trend is estimated to continue until 2040. In 1970, less than 40% of each country’s residents were living in a city. The highest
proportion
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 was for the
Philippines
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 which was slightly more than 30%. Over the next decade,
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 the figure for the
Philippines
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 remained constant, The
proportion
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 of Malaysians who were living in a city jumped to about 40%
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 and surpassed the figure for the
Philippines
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. It continued to improve
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 and reached well over 70% in 2020. The percentage of Indonesians who were living in
cities
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 rose gradually over the period in question; it started at just above 10% and finished at almost 50%. The figure for Thailand
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 improved
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 but at a slower pace than others. It witnessed an improvement of almost 10% until 2020. If we look at the prediction part of the graph, it is evident that the
proportion
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 of residents who live in
cities
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 in Malaysia is estimated to continue to rise to more than 80%. It is predicted for Indonesia to reach 60% of its people living in
cities
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. The figures for the
Philippines
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 and Thailand are
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 predicted to continue improving by less than 10% and almost 20% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, cities, philippines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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