The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.
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The line graph illustrates data about the
proportion
of the residents of four Asian countries who live in
cities
in a 50-year period, between 1970 and 2020. It
also
provides predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, the percentage of the population living in
cities
increased significantly,
while
Malaysia headed the list. The general upward trend is estimated to continue until 2040. In 1970, less than 40% of each country’s residents were living in a city. The highest
proportion
was for the
Philippines
which was slightly more than 30%. Over the next decade,
while
the figure for the
Philippines
remained constant, The
proportion
of Malaysians who were living in a city jumped to about 40%
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and surpassed the figure for the
Philippines
. It continued to improve
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and reached well over 70% in 2020. The percentage of Indonesians who were living in
cities
rose gradually over the period in question; it started at just above 10% and finished at almost 50%. The figure for Thailand
also
improved
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but at a slower pace than others. It witnessed an improvement of almost 10% until 2020. If we look at the prediction part of the graph, it is evident that the
proportion
of residents who live in
cities
in Malaysia is estimated to continue to rise to more than 80%. It is predicted for Indonesia to reach 60% of its people living in
cities
. The figures for the
Philippines
and Thailand are
also
predicted to continue improving by less than 10% and almost 20% respectively.
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