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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Other, however, say that this would have limit effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Crime always was the largest problem in society and its penalty has been changing since the first law. Nowadays, in most
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 a lawmaking system
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 penalties, like the death sentence.
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 argues that the death penalty needs to be applied for the most violent crimes gives many convincing arguments. First of all, containing prisoners in jails
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 huge financial support which is taken from the taxes. Decreased amount of prisoners will allow
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 money on a better project,
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 of the educational system.
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, for those who got a life
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 it could be a
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mercy
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life-long suffering. The most obvious
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 of the judgment system. If after a sentence some
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 that proves
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 of that person have been found, it would be impossible to revive a dead body.
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 of
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failure
 and its
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. In my opinion, most of the guilty people deserve a chance of redemption. There are cases when prisoners after a long time in jail change and afterwards
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 their value for humanity.
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 happens not often, but if there is a tiny chance of changing a person, we must try to do so. In the end, it could be said that there are many varieties of crimes and punishment, but every single one of them should be observed personally and there is no way of finding a single solution for all of them.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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