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Education abroad is the key factor for becoming successful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays receiving an
education
 can be hard to come by as exams are becoming harder and grade boundaries are being set higher.
Education
 abroad provides many people with the skills to have a successful career they would have
otherwise
 not received.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why I believe
this
 to be true. Living in a developed country like the United Kingdom comes with its own hardships. As many flocks to work and study there, because of
this
,
as a consequence
, it creates massive competition like universities only allowing the top performing students the luxury of
education
while
 it leaves the rest to either repeat or apply again wasting their time doing so. So applying to countries like Bulgaria or Romania for
education
,
for example
, allows you to experience an exemplary
education
 as they do not require you to be the best.
Instead
, they take your potential and build you up to have a successful career despite the low secondary
education
 test levels.  Studying abroad provides you with more practical experience
due to
 the fact that they are underdeveloped. Take student doctors,
for instance
, they would be able to acquire more practical skills as they would treat more patients that do not have the funding to pay for private health care,
thus
 seeing more cases.
Similarly
, dental students would have a similar
education
due to
 the fact that fewer people would have teeth in good condition compared to the residents in the UK and so
as a result
 they would receive more practice.
Besides
 these qualities moving abroad to study
also
 gives you the chance to learn about other cultures and how they live granting you a better understanding of the world we live in by living it first-hand. In conclusion, in my opinion, I believe that receiving
education
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 abroad provides a better chance of becoming successful as they are more advantages to doing so.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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