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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
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The bar chart compares the number of
incidents
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 and
injuries
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 for every 100 million passenger miles travelled on five different types of public transport in 2002.
It is clear that
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 most
incidents
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 and
injuries
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 took place on demand response vehicles.
By contrast
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, commuter
rail
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services
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 recorded by far the lowest figures. A total of 225
incidents
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 and 173
injuries
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, per 100 million passenger miles travelled, took place on demand-response transport
services
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. These figures were nearly three times as high as those for the second highest category, bus
services
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. There were 76
incidents
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 and 66 people were injured on buses.
Rail
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services
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 experienced fewer problems. The number of
incidents
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 on light
rail
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 trains equalled the figure recorded for buses, but there were significantly fewer
injuries
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, at only 39. Heavy
rail
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services
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 saw lower numbers of
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 events than light
rail
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services
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, but commuter
rail
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 passengers were even less likely to experience problems. In fact, only 20
incidents
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 and 17
injuries
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 occurred on commuter trains.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, rail, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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