The given maps represent Grange Park in 1920 and the same park today. Overall, many facilities were constructed, except entrance place everything had changed gradually.

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The pictorial representation illustrates the Grange

Park

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1920 and the changes done at present. All in all, many new facilities are constructed and some of them are

postioned

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positioned

different

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place

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. Only

entrance

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the entrance

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doors

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and

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one of the Rose gardens is still

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the old place. It is evident from the map that the big fountain in the centre of the

park

has been replaced by a Rose garden which has seating

arrangement

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around it .

In addition

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, the stage for musicians is upgraded into an amphitheatre.

However

, the Rose garden located in the north of the stage is still there but the one in the east of the northern entrance is reconstructed into a cafe.

Furthermore

, the pond for

water

plants has been rebuilt as a large

water

creature and is shifted

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the place of the

1920's

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1920s

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glass house.

Inspite

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In spite

water

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the water

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pond now there is a playground for children .

Moreover

, an underground car

park

has

also

been built which has its way through

east

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the east

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side of the

park

near

water

creature

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On the contrary

Aldon

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the Aldon

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street

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entrance is untouched.

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