The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.

The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
The given bar chart gives
the
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information about
people
lived
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who lived
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in rural
areas
,
township
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townships
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and
cities
whp
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was
born in and outside of
Australia
from 1995 to 2010. At
the
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first glance at the graph, it can be clearly seen that
people
who lived in
cities
were higher in
number
compare
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compared
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to towns and rural
areasin
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areas in
areas
1995 .
Number
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The number
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of
People
who came overseas
were
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was
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at
the
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a
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peak
by
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of
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60 thousand
whereas
people
born in
Australia
were
aprroximately
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approximately
50
thousands
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thousand
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. the
number
of
people
who lived in town who
born
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were born
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in was 20000
while
people
who
born
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were born
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outside was less .it was less than
people
who lived in rural
areas
as it shows around 40000 in 1995 who
born
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were born
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outside and 30000 who
born
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were born
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inside in 1995. On the
otherside
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other side
, the
number
of
people
who
born
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were born
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in
Australia
lived
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who lived
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in town and rural
areas
was exactly
same
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the same
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in 2010
while
who
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those who
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came from outside
shows
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showed
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really
less
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fewer
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people
.
on the contrary
, in 2010 both the
people
who
born
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were born
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in and out were
prefered
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preferred
to live in
cities
. overseas
people
were the highest at 80000 and Australian
people
was
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were
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just above the 60000 . All in all,
majority
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the majority
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of humans who came from other counties or
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are
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citizen
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citizens
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of
Australia
prefered
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preferred
to live in
cities
as
comapre
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compared
compare
to
town
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towns
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and rural
areas
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, areas, cities, australia, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographics
  • Migration patterns
  • Population distribution
  • Rural
  • Urban
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Growth rate
  • Settlement patterns
  • Residential categories
  • Urbanization
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic opportunities
  • Lifestyle preferences
  • Residential mobility
  • Urban planning
  • Governmental policies
  • Community impact
  • Data analysis
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