The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
The given bar chart gives
the
information about Correct article usage
apply
people
lived
in rural Correct pronoun usage
who lived
areas
, township
and Fix the agreement mistake
townships
cities
whp
born in and outside of Correct your spelling
was
Australia
from 1995 to 2010.
At the
first glance at the graph, it can be clearly seen that Correct article usage
apply
people
who lived in cities
were higher in number
compare
to towns and rural Change the form of the verb
compared
areasin
1995 . Correct your spelling
areas in
areas
Number
of Correct article usage
The number
People
who came overseas were
at Change the verb form
was
the
peak Correct article usage
a
by
60 thousand Change preposition
of
whereas
people
born in Australia
were aprroximately
50 Correct your spelling
approximately
thousands
. the Change to singular
thousand
number
of people
who lived in town who born
in was 20000 Add a missing verb
were born
while
people
who born
outside was less .it was less than Add a missing verb
were born
people
who lived in rural areas
as it shows around 40000 in 1995 who born
outside and 30000 who Add a missing verb
were born
born
inside in 1995.
On the Add a missing verb
were born
otherside
, the Correct your spelling
other side
number
of people
who born
in Add a missing verb
were born
Australia
lived
in town and rural Correct pronoun usage
who lived
areas
was exactly same
in 2010 Correct article usage
the same
while
who
came from outside Correct pronoun usage
those who
shows
really Wrong verb form
showed
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
people
. on the contrary
, in 2010 both the people
who born
in and out were Add a missing verb
were born
prefered
to live in Correct your spelling
preferred
cities
. overseas people
were the highest at 80000 and Australian people
was
just above the 60000 .
All in all, Correct subject-verb agreement
were
majority
of humans who came from other counties orCorrect article usage
the majority
Add a missing verb
are
citizen
of Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
Australia
prefered
to live in Correct your spelling
preferred
cities
as comapre
to Correct your spelling
compared
compare
town
and rural Fix the agreement mistake
towns
areas
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, areas, cities, australia, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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