The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The diagram depicts a comparison between the
water
cycle
in the wildness and inhabited
cities
,
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and elaborates on the differences in
water
behaviours in both places.
overall
, the polluted factors and constructions interfering in the urban
water
cycle
are more obvious,
while
in the forests the
water
cycle
is more natural and cleaner.
Moreover
, the effect of tree transpiration is fundamental for the
water
circulation in nature,
while
we can not notice any effect
for
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trees on the
water
cycle
in urban areas. Rain is fall in both places,
while
the majority of the rain goes through the land in the forest to reach the
water
table and part of the precipitation goes to the sea, the rain amount is reduced in
cities
because of the structures and
small
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proportion reaches the bottom and joins the weak
water
baseflow. The precipitation in forested areas is more constant and higher than in
cities
because of transpiration and evaporation how ever in the
cities
the buildings reduce the previous processes and the runoff is polluted
due to
human activities.
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