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Today level of stress at the work place are increasing tremendously. What are the causes? what can the problem create?

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In
this
 era of modernisation, there is a tense atmosphere at various corporations and offices
that is
 increasing rapidly.
Due to
this
, both individuals and corporations face serval issues like the
lack
 of concentration at
work
 and losing customers. In
this
 essay, various sources that bring stressful environments at the workplace
along with
 the issues will be discussed.
To begin
 with the origin of pressure at the place of
work
.
Firstly
, the community prefer money over diet.
Due to
 a
lack
 of a healthy diet,
employees
 are not able to concentrate properly at
work
 which results in a back lock.
Secondly
, in the race of competition, everyone is not only becoming materialistic but
also
 has a fake personality. Changes in people's behaviour bring a tense atmosphere at the workstations. To illustrate, a
lack
 of a healthy lifestyle makes a person lazy during
work
due to
 which paperwork never gets sorted on time and in future, the stack of filling brings the stress level of every employee to the apex.
Therefore
, the invention of stress at
work
 is because of overeating junk, frozen food and the competitive, money-minded nature of
employees
. Moving towards the consequences, the company's profit will drop rapidly if all the
employees
 feel dizzy at their
work
.
This
 results in more turnover of the working members and poor goodwill in the market.
Furthermore
,
due to
 the competitive environment at
work
, there will be a
lack
 of teamwork which brings personal conflicts among people.
Last
 but not least, everyone wants a peaceful atmosphere during
work
 but pressure at
work
 will result in losing talented
employees
 which will result in customer dissatisfaction.
To conclude
,
employees
 are under pressure during working hours
due to
 unhealthy food and competitive nature which results in a barrier to the company's growth, conflicts in the office,
lack
 of teamwork and customer dissatisfaction.
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