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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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These pie charts illustrate the proportion of the population by three different
age
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 groups in
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000, with predictions for 2050.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the projection for 2050,
people
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 aged 15-59
years
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 will increase in
Yemen
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,
while
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 Itay's them will decrease. Focusing on
Yemen
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 and Italy's graphs in 2000, the percentage of
people
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 aged 0-14
years
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 accounted for almost half of
Yemen
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's total population at 50.1%.
Although
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people
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 aged 15-59
years
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 made up 46.3%, the
age
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group
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 over 60
years
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 had 3.6%.
On the other hand
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, In Italy, the proportion of the generation of 15-59
years
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 had over half of the total at 61.6%. The percentage of
people
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 aged 0-14
years
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 was the lowest at 14.3%,
while
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 the
age
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group
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 over 60
years
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 had 24.1%. Turning to the projection for 2050 in both countries, it is estimated that the
group
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 of 15-59
years
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 will increase to 57.3% in
Yemen
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,
whereas
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people
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 aged 0-14
years
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 will decline to 37.0%.
However
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, the
age
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group
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 of 15-59
years
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 will show a fall of 46.2% in Italy. The proportion of the
age
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group
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 of 0-14 and over 60
years
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 will be 11.5% and 42.2% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, yemen, people, years, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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