The bar chart compares female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK in 2013 and 2014.

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The chart shows the rates for

unemployment

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among

women

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in the UK during

2013

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the 2013

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-2014 years period.

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Overall

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trend for

unemployment

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is pleasing for three

countries

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among

four

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the four

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considered. They are England, Wales, Scotland and

Nothern

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Northern

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Ireland. The

rate

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is decreasing

for

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0.3-1%

except

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Scotland, which has the opposite situation of

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a 0.6

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% increase. If we compare four

countries

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of the UK, Nothern Ireland has the lowest level of jobless

women

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. It

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4.6% in 2014, which shows that the percentage

rate

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women

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who found a job in comparison with 2013 is higher

for

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1%. Almost the same level of female joblessness is in Wales

for

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5.4%, and it

is going

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went

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down in 2014 to 5.0%. It is a pretty good index, because

in contrast

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Scotland

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Scotland's

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women

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women's

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unemployment

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rate

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was

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6.7% in 2014,

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which

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is higher than

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the previous

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year

for

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0.6%. Fewer number of jobless females reported in 2014 compared with 2015 in England.

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Also

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the

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apply

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this

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country fixed the maximum ratio of 6.8% in 2013 among all

countries

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researched. In general, the

rate

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woman

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women

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unemployment

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in the UK

countries

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kept

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remained

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at an acceptable level with slight

difference

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differences

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passing from year to year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, women, countries, rate with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

193 words

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The bar chart compares female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK in 2013 and 2014.

some people think that success in life comes form hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?

Some think they can use as much fresh water as they want, but others say governments should limit water use because it is not endless. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say children no longer need to develop handwriting skills. Others believe that handwriting is still important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.