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It is widely believed that parents should teach their children to be good members of society,but there is a strong

It is widely believed that
parents
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 should teach their
children
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 to be good
members
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 of
society
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,but there is a strong argument among
people
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 that
school
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 is the right
place
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 to educate
children
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.
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,I believe that
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 issue should be discussed by builders because these are the
people
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 whose
children
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 are brought up.
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,recognized that
parents
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 should guide their
children
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 in how to behave in a public
place
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 or how to treat
society
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.
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 is mainly because
children
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 will obey the words
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 their
parents
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 than teachers.
Parents
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 should teach
children
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 basic qualities
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 as respect,obedience and honesty.
Parents
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 should teach
children
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 these qualities from early childhood so that there are no problems with
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 in the future.
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,my
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brother
"s daughter,who is in the third grade,
respectsthe
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respects the
respects
 elders and helps the elderly when they need help.
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 good quality that has been taught at home and ,of course ,what they learned from early childhood,it all becomes part of someone"s personality and
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characteristics
.
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,what these learn from their
children
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 makes vivid impressions on
people
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.
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,
parents
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 should carefully teach their
children
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 the moral values and responsibilities of
society
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.
Children
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 by nature imitate their family
members
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 and
therefore
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parents
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 can teach their
children
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 to be good
members
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 of
society
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 or something else.Most
children
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 obey their
parents
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 more than anyone else and the instructions given by
parents
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 are
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 more likely to declare themselves in
society
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.Not all
parents
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 can spend enough time with their
children
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 because of the ever-growing business outside the home,and
school
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 plays an important role for
such
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parents
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. Some students listen to
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 teachers they like and follow their instructions as written laws. Well,
on the other hand
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, there are certain groups of
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 who fiercely claim that
school
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 is the right
place
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 to teach
children
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 to be good
members
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 of
society
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.One of these reasons why
this
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 opinion is that
children
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 lack attention to spend time with their
parents
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 because they can both be employed or they can keep their child in a dormitory.
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 is a
place
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 where a child finds
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friends and begins to manifest himself in
society
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.

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