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The maps below shows change of the bookstore in 2000 and now.

The maps below shows change of the bookstore in 2000 and now.
#maps #change #bookstore
The maps below
shows
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show
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change
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the change
a change
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 of the bookstore in 2000 and now.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a non-considerable change in
locations
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the locations
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 of each establishment. The first most noticeable that now the fiction room became small in
compare
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comparison
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 to 2000,
in addition
,
art
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the art
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, hobbies and cookery rooms that
was
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were
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on
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in
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middle
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the middle
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 of
a
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the
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 bookstore
now
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are now
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 placed near to fiction room
instead
 of them now placed three tables.
Likewise
,
fiction
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the fiction
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 apartment that was on the right side of
map
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the map
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now
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is now
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 replaced
to
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with
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 non-fiction,
as well as
cafe
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the cafe
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 now established in place of non-fiction.
However
, only a few apartments Travel, New
books
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Books
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 and Service Desk are still
on
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in
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places
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place
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.
Furthermore
, there are only
few
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a few
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 modifications,
such
 as
cafe
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a cafe
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 and tables that
put
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are put
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on
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in
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 the centre of a bookstore.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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