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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the changes which took place in the public
park
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, Grange
Park
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, from 1920 to today. In 1920, there was a fountain in the middle of the
park
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, it is now replaced by a new Rose garden which surrounds by four seats area. And the old four seats area, the stage for musicians, and one of the Rose gardens on the left side of the two entrances were demolished
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 an amphitheatre for concerts was added.
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, another rose garden, the pond for water plants, and the Glasshouse which were used to locate on the right side of the map are substituted by a Cafe, a Children’s playground, and a Water feature respectively. There was another seating area that was knocked down to establish an entrance to the underground car
park
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.
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, except for the two entrances and one of the three Rose gardens which was located at the top of the left-hand corner maintained the same, other facilities were all removed or replaced.
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