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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
Some
people
 think that
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people
 who have
the
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professional jobs like doctors,
laywers
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lawyers
, or engineers have to
work
 only in the
country
 where they have studied and others think that
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professionals
 have the right to choose the
country
 where they
work
.
First,
the
people
 who say the
professionals
 have to
work
 in the nation where they were trained can insist that the
professionals
 need to get
a
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responsible for their job, not just money or
own
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their own
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 reputation. The
professionals
 need to improve
their
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country
 where they studied by using their knowledge and techniques. If many
professionals
 gained their
ability
, the nations could be strong in the area of
profession
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professions
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such
 as
hospital
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hospitals
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, factories, and so on.
On the other hand
, others believe that the
people
 who
work
 with
the
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professional knowledge or skills should be free to choose their
work places
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workplaces
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 or nations. Their professional jobs are available by their own
ability
 and effort, so gaining the right to choose the company which have
higher
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a higher
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 reputation is reasonable. If there is a
country
 where make the professional’s
ability
improved
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is improved
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 or much better, they probably choose that
country
 for their
work place
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workplace
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. In my case, I agree with the opinion that the
professional
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professionals
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 have the right to decide the place where they
work
. The better
ability
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their ability
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 and techniques, the higher quality of
work place
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workplace
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 they can go
.
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 That’s why many
people
 invest their time or money
,
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 and
also
 do an effort for their goals, I think. In conclusion, the
people
 who have
the
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professional jobs should be free to
work
 in another
country
 if they wish.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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