Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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modern era ,it is
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common
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that advertisement provides information that
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forces
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them to
purchasing
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purchase
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products.
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other few
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source of data
hence
they not giving much significance.
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both perspectives but
also
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point of view in conclusion. To commence with
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notion, there are myriad things to
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in
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favour of broadcasting about a commodity helps to increase sales. First and foremost is single screen transfer
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of knowledge
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to
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audience.
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affects the demand and supply of products.
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,
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the majority
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advertisements have no option of
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skipping
while
using
internet
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the internet
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. As a result,
public
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the public
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are
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watching
this
forcefully
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grants
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knowledge about new brands they are willing to buy .
For instance
, in a technological era,we have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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for searching for
a particular information
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particular information
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by
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with
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only one click on devices. All the
informations
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information
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are provided with frequent advertisement without
skiping
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skipping
shipping
options . The public
aware
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about
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of
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a
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new outputs or
sevices
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services
that motivate
people
to purchase the commodity.
On the other hand
, marketing is
also
annoying
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an annoying
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thing for a certain group of
people
. They think that advertisement is not a noticeable
items
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item
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so not have to pay much attention. Mainly, it is
distribing
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disturbing
distributing
while
browsing in a busy manner , sometimes
this
link
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redirects
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to another site.
This
leads to
loss
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the loss
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main website link and
also
our
valueble
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valuable
time .
Moreover
, sometimes companies
provides
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provide
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false advertisements about their products and services especially cosmetic items.
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,when the number of advertisements
become
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more and more than past ,
so
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people
just ignore them.
To sum up
,
people
think differently about advertising . But in my opinion , it is successfully achieving its goals by persuading
people
to buy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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