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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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the
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apply
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information about jobless people
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who spent
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spent
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spending
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time
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last
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 year in
uk
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UK
.There are two
category
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categories
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 in the table .
such
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 as
woman
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women
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 and men.
Time
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 is
afternoon
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 and morning
shows
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shown
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 in
this
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 table. On the one hand,
Unemployed
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the Unemployed
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 spent more
time
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 in the morning for job hunting .The
percentage
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 is 22%.
whereas
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 2
percentage
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 of the
time
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 spent in the morning for a drinking and
arround
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around
 siting.
However
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 ,jobless people in the
afternoon
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 spent more
time
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for
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apply
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a
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apply
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watching tv .The
percentage
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 is 14%.In the
afternoon
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 less
time
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spent
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is spent
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for
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apply
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a
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apply
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drinking .
On the other hand
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,Many
woman
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women
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 spent more
time
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 in the morning for
a domestic works
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domestic works
a domestic work
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.The
percentage
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 is 49%.women spent 1
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percentage
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per cent
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 of the
time
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 for a drink and sports in the morning .
Subsequently
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 ,women in the
afternoon
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 more
time
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 spent for
a
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apply
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Housework and minimum
time
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 spent
for
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on
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a
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apply
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drinking in the
afternoon
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. In conclusion ,women spent more
time
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for
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on
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 housework in the morning and in the
afternoon
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 .Men spent more
time
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for
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apply
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watching tv and job hunting in the morning and in the
afternoon
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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