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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#uk #time #year #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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the
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information about jobless people
Correct pronoun usage
who spent
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spent
Wrong verb form
spending
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time
last
 year in
uk
Correct your spelling
UK
.There are two
category
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categories
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 in the table .
such
 as
woman
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women
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 and men.
Time
 is
afternoon
 and morning
shows
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shown
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 in
this
 table. On the one hand,
Unemployed
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the Unemployed
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 spent more
time
 in the morning for job hunting .The
percentage
 is 22%.
whereas
 2
percentage
 of the
time
 spent in the morning for a drinking and
arround
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around
 siting.
However
 ,jobless people in the
afternoon
 spent more
time
for
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apply
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a
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apply
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watching tv .The
percentage
 is 14%.In the
afternoon
 less
time
spent
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is spent
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for
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apply
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a
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apply
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drinking .
On the other hand
,Many
woman
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women
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 spent more
time
 in the morning for
a domestic works
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domestic works
a domestic work
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.The
percentage
 is 49%.women spent 1
percentage
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per cent
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 of the
time
 for a drink and sports in the morning .
Subsequently
 ,women in the
afternoon
 more
time
 spent for
a
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apply
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Housework and minimum
time
 spent
for
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on
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a
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apply
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drinking in the
afternoon
. In conclusion ,women spent more
time
for
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on
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 housework in the morning and in the
afternoon
 .Men spent more
time
for
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apply
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watching tv and job hunting in the morning and in the
afternoon
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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