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The maps below show recent changes in town of Kimsvile. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show recent changes in town of Kimsvile. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps show the main changes which have taken place
the
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in the
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 town of Kimsville between the year 2002 and today In general, it appears that Kimsville has become a much more modern city, with far more transport facilities and leisure equipment One of the main change is that
trees
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the trees
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 at the bottom left side of the
map
has
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have
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 been replaced by
football
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a football
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 stadium modern . The trees above
was
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were
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 cut down and converted into new apartments. Today, a new train station has been built between the two buildings.
Besides
 , the old cinema has been turned into
the
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a
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 pub without change in appearance
whereas
 the factory
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nearby
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near by
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nearby
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 has been knocked down and constructed a
sky- crapper
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sky-crapper
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 software company
Howere
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However
 there are many places
where
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that
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has
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have
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been
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remained during that period. The city centre at the
central
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centre
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 of the
map
 has been unchanged in size.
Moreover
, the green zone
in
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on
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 the right of the
map
 has been kept
nearly
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for nearly
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 20 years and the shopping centre between two
forest
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forests
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in
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at
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 the top of the
map
 still has been conserved
in
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apply
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today
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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