An increasingly number of professionals , such as doctors and teachers , are leaving their own poorer countries yo work in developed countries . What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation ?
Nowadays, many
professionals
such
as doctors or teachers prefer to live in developing countries
so they leave their own home and country . In my ,opinion this
is largely
because of inexpensive payment and lack of modern work devices and the best solution lies in increasing employment and salary for Replace the adverb
large
professionals
and creating a comfortable and well-equipped workplace.
One of the principal causes that can lead to moving to modern places is a less
salary. Correct word choice
lower
This
is large because in poorer countries
less paying
attention to the best Verb problem
apply
professionals
and they can earn more money in developing countries
rather than in their own backward countries
. In addition
, this
uncomfortable workplace is the best reason for this
kind of professional. Today, there are few countries
that can afford modern equipment and offices. Many professional doctors who live and work in developing countries
, for example
, migrated from their countries
of birth in order to earn more money in hospitals equipped with comfortable working equipment.
There are several actions that could be taken to solve the problems described above. Firstly
a simple solution would be to encourage workers who master of own jobs with well-paying attention. Furthermore
, the best solution to this
problem is for poor countries
to try to create workplaces and offices like modern countries
and to create new jobs. For example
, some of the emigrated professionals
came back to their own poorer countries
because the government built new office buildings and offer
Wrong verb form
offered
more
salaries . Correct word choice
higher
This
way would be profitable for both employees and country
In summary, the root cause of leaving poorer Correct article usage
the country
countries
is less salary
and unavailable necessary technologies and Fix the agreement mistake
low salaries
this
issue keeps giving birth to circulate
globally as long as well-equipped workplaces and well paying are not taken.Wrong verb form
circulating
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