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Some people think cirties are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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These days, many
people
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 are quite concerned about choosing the right place to live their own life. In
this
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 essay, I will look at the pros and cons, aspects of living in
large
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a large
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 and crowded town compared to the
countryside
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 and draw a reasoned conclusion based on my ideas. One of the most significant benefits of settling in a
city
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 is health care. Usually, there is
well-functioning
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a well-functioning
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health care
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healthcare
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 system available to citizens of the town
such
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 as
hospital
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hospitals
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 and clinics, with many specialised doctors and healthcare professionals.
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, in the
city
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, it is very convenient to find physicians, dentists and nurses.
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, often habitants of the rural
area
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 have to travel all the way to the
city
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 to visit the professionals in the
city
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.
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,
people
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 who live in the
countryside
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 suffer from the lack of health care laboratories, hospitals and
chamber
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chambers
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 of professional doctors which are not close to them and
is
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this is
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 one of the reasons
people
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 prefer to stay closer to
city
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 centres.
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, a
city
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 offers better educational, recreational and employment facilities which are quite tough to find in a rural
area
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.
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,
the
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apply
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crime is the biggest challenge that inhabitants of a crowded
city
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 have to face.
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, murder, rape, theft, motor vehicle offence,
drugs
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drug
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 abuse, firearms & offensive weapon cases are more common in
city
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 areas than in
a
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the
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countryside
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. Even with
criminal
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the criminal
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 justice system and punishment by state law in cities, the rate of these heinous crimes is much higher there than
any
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in any
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 other part of the country
such
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 as villages and rural
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area
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areas
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. The rate of
the
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apply
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crime is much less in
a
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the
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countryside
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 than
a
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in a
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city
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due to
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 the less population and economic factors of that
area
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.
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, the
people
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 who live in
a
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the
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countryside
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 are much protected against violation of their rights. In conclusion, both large towns and urban areas have some conveniences and drawbacks for
its
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their
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 citizens.
Living
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The living
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 location should ultimately be chosen depending on an individual's base on their professional job.
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,
farmer
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farmers
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 ideally will choose the rural
area
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 and
on the other hand
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, IT
professional
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professionals
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 will prefer to be close to
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city
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the city
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 centre.
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