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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Other prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
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City
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Cities
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 are extending day by day
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 the emigration of the population from the countryside.
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 some people including me prefer to live in big urban
areas
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, others
claim
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 that living in rural
areas
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 would be better. I will argue both sides and give my opinion. First of all, the
city
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 has a lot of conveniences, people who are unemployed can find work quickly, and children can have
the
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modern and higher education.
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, in Ho Chi Minh
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city
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, many private schools accept
to
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students from other cities c in Vietnam or foreign students can learn
at
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there. The big hospital, the good doctor
is
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applied
to
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there to work too.
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, with significant development in transport systems and infrastructures commuting is more convenient and achievable.
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, it is more comfortable and quite faster to use a suburban train to go to work and back out to your home.
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, some individuals
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 that in villages you are more likely to breathe fresh air and the environment might be more clear in which there would be less trash, For
city
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 management would lead to a less polluted
city
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. Another
claim
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 about rural
areas
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 that must be considered is that local people
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 is available in hypermarkets which are usually placed in big urban
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.
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,
i
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 agree with the advantage of living in a
city
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such
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 as accessible facilities will certainly out weight the other side rural.
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