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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Other prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
City
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 are extending day by day
due to
 the emigration of the population from the countryside.
While
 some people including me prefer to live in big urban
areas
, others
claim
 that living in rural
areas
 would be better. I will argue both sides and give my opinion. First of all, the
city
 has a lot of conveniences, people who are unemployed can find work quickly, and children can have
the
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modern and higher education.
For example
, in Ho Chi Minh
city
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, many private schools accept
to
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students from other cities c in Vietnam or foreign students can learn
at
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there. The big hospital, the good doctor
is
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applied
to
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there to work too.
Additionally
, with significant development in transport systems and infrastructures commuting is more convenient and achievable.
For example
, it is more comfortable and quite faster to use a suburban train to go to work and back out to your home.
On the other hand
, some individuals
claim
 that in villages you are more likely to breathe fresh air and the environment might be more clear in which there would be less trash, For
city
 management would lead to a less polluted
city
. Another
claim
 about rural
areas
 that must be considered is that local people
claim
 is available in hypermarkets which are usually placed in big urban
areas
.
To conclude
,
i
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 agree with the advantage of living in a
city
such
 as accessible facilities will certainly out weight the other side rural.
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