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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views give your opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
Some
people
 like to live in the
cities
 rather than in the
countryside
, but a large
people
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 would like
countryside
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the countryside
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.
in
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In
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 my opinion, living in
urban
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an urban
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 or suburban has its distinctive benefits,
however
, I would agree to live in
countryside
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the countryside
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 than living in
crowed
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crowded
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cities
. On the one hand, living in the urban is more convenient and quick. Today, many grocery stores, shops and necessities have been built and decided to serve
for
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apply
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the
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apply
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individuals. Especially in resident areas, shops can be easily seen there.
Secondly
, education in
cities
 is interested and invested by the government. Schools and classes are
concentrated
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more concentrated
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 in the urban areas than the suburban.
On the other hand
,
countryside
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the countryside
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 has a good environment. Because of less factories and businesses are built there, the air is more fresh and clear than in the urban. So, residents
live
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who live
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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has
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have
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 better mental health and live a happy life than one live in
cities
.
Moreover
, the
people
 in the
countryside
 are more open and willing to help each other
whereas
 the
people
 in the city spend very busy lives, and have no time to think about others. For the reasons mentioned above, I like the slow pace of
countryside’s
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countryside
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 life.
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