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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside . Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
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 have different
view
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 of living places.
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 some
people
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 among the mass choose to live in cities, there are
other
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others
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who want
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want
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wants
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 to
spent
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 their
live
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 in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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. In
this
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 essay, I will look at the pros and cons, aspects of living in
large
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a large
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 and crowded town compared to the
countryside
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 and draw a reasoned conclusion based on my ideas. On
one
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 hand , a group of
people
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 prefer to live in cities
due to
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 the benefits. Urban areas are believed to come with modern facilities and
convenients
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convenient
conveniences
convenience
.It is not difficult for citizens to find education centres,
foods
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food
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 or
entertainments
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entertainment
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 and all
kind
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kinds
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 of facilities
such
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 as shopping malls, universities, cinemas, hospitals and restaurants.
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, urban industries and companies offer huge opportunities to professionals and entrepreneurs
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mean
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 no concern of unemployment for its residents.
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, some
people
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 think that the best place to live is in
the
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a
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 rural area. It is believed that
people
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 who live in these areas have a healthier life because they breathe fresher air, they eat more hygienic and natural fruits and vegetables and they live in a more relaxed and
quite
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quiet
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 environment.
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, their life expectancy is longer than those who live in cities or towns.
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, the tranquillity maintained
along
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in
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 the
countryside
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 is another positive feature of rural habitation.
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, the family and social bonds in villages are known to be more concrete. Separations on
basis
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 of urban gizmos like communalism and social status are seldom there. In conclusion, living in the city or the
countryside
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 has its own positive and negative sides, and it depends on the preference of each individual. I personally choose to live in the city area to enhance my career and plan to live in the
countryside
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 when I retire.
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