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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Many individuals believe that cities are the greatest accommodation to spend their lives living in. Others desire to live in rural areas. In my opinion, both places have advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, living in the city life can cause stress and sometimes loneliness.
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 we must work long hours to pay a living cost or earn money without entertainment.
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 transport like air pollution and the noise from vehicles.
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, people who decide to make their home in Vietnam will be able to work in many different areas and it is very easy for them to get stressed after work.
On the other hand
, living in rural areas individuals
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 face a lack of job opportunities.
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city lives, the countryside is more peaceful and happy. Thailand is a prime example,
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 the rate of stress is very low. In conclusion, living in both places have its advantages and disadvantages. But
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 prefer to live in the countryside for
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 peaceful life.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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